Wednesday, September 3, 2014
Welcome to the AWT1002-05 Class Blog Site! Each week, I will post a blog prompt during your MML period (always Wednesdays in Building 4). You must write a response to the blog prompt in the "post a comment" section of the blog. I expect you to complete your response writing by the end of the class period (you may finish by the end of the day for homework). The intention of this class blog site is to encourage creative writing and creative thinking. However, I still expect you to use academic writing including proper capitalization, punctuation, and vocabulary. Your blog post should be a paragraph (8-10 sentences minimum) in length.
Blog Prompt: You take a sip from your drink and suddenly you feel differently. At first it's just a tingling feeling, but then the feeling becomes sharp. That may be because your torso has an extra arm protruding from it. You take another sip of the drink and another arm appears. Then a wing. Write about the whole story of your experience. What did the drink taste like? Where did you get the drink from? What happens if you finish the drink?
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one day, i was in the school with my friends, the weather was very hot, and i was thirsty , so i went to the cafeteria and i bought a juice , it was different from other juices , it was very sweet , it was an apple juice , I’ve never drunk a juice like , after i took many sips , i discovered that some arms appears , after that, two wings appears , I was shocked , I thought that I was dreaming , the problem is that , I’m the only one that had this thing , even though all my friends have drunk the same juice as me , after few minutes, my friends discovered that two big black horns appeared on my head , some of them was scared from me , they started running away and screaming, the more scary thing is that, when I wanted to shout and call them , some fire came out from my mouth , I really enjoyed that feeling, I burned all the school and killed all of my friends , after few minutes , I hear someone shouting , shouting my name very louder , oh no o , it’s my mom , she was trying to wake me up , it was 8:00 am , I missed the school bus .
ReplyDeleteAh, the classic dream sequence. Good work. Please work on your punctuation when writing blogs. There are some run-on sentences.
DeleteName: Wafae El otmani
ReplyDeleteDate: September 3rd, 2014
Course: AWT1002-05
Assignment: Write about the whole story of your experience. What did the drink taste like? Where did you get the drink from? What happens if you finish the drink?
This last summer, I was invited to a party by a friend. The party was in a huge, beautiful house to be more precise it was near to a pool. It was an enormous party many guest was here.One of my friend insist to drink one of the strangest beverages I have never drunk and seen before. At the beginning, I took a sip from my drink, and suddenly I felt something strange happen to me. At first it was just a tingling feeling, but then the feeling became sharp. I couldn’t deny that the drink was very delicious. When I went to the bathroom, my torso has an extra arm protruding from it. I didn’t understand anything why this beverage responded like this, so I called my friend to come in order to help me understand the situation. He came in a hurry, and asked me about the problem that I had. He gave me the name of this beverage, and we tried to do some research about this. I learned that my life will change forever and I will be a guardian angel since this party.
Nice formal writing format. But, it is not necessary for blogs; only use it for paragraphs and essays. It's really cool that you got turned into a guardian angel. Very interesting plot twist.
DeleteI ordered a simple cup of green tea at the university's cafeteria. When I started to drink it, it was like a fire going down my throat. I was burning on the inside and nobody was able to help me, I was hopeless. After thirty seconds of suffering the fire finally calm down. But unfortunately my calvary wasn’t over, it became worse. I felt an unbearable pain in my torso. And then an arm appears out of it and another and finally a wing came out of my back. I was becoming a monster in front of everybody and any of them seems to notice that I needed help. To finish my transformation a second wing appears and I started to fly in the cafeteria. Nobody was looking at me, they were all on their cellphones checking Facebook and playing, I was invisible to them. Obviously, I didn’t know how to fly or how to control my wings, so I get too high and I banged my head on the ceiling, I lost consciousness for a while and finally woke up lengthened on the ground, alone and human.
ReplyDeleteWow! Great short story. You have great creative writing potential and wonderful ideas. I love your vivid descriptions. Hint: work on your vocabulary a bit. Some words don't make sense (i.e. "calvary).
DeleteIt was just one of those ordinary days when you’re home alone, I went out to buy something to drink and a snack but it was too late so all the shops were closed. On my way home I met accidentally a charming lady well dressed, she offered me one of her bottles with a pink liquid, I was too thirsty to ask what was it despite her mysterious look, I just took it and thanked her.
ReplyDeleteI decided then to taste that drink on my bedroom favorite sofa, the first sip was amazing, it tasted like a cherry juice, and then it got intense second after second on my inside, when suddenly an extra arm was produced from my torso that was so creepy. I added another sip; it was so magic that I couldn’t stop!
The second sip was accompanied by two wings. After finishing the drink , I felt so heavy I decided to look into the mirror, I was so scared , I knew that I lost my human look . After I had taken a long breath I looked there.. I became a bee, a huge bee. I didn’t know how to feel, I was completely shocked but at least a bit thankful because I didn’t turn into an ugly monster. I was feeling all those fairy tales emotions I’ve ever hated in movies.
I was so ashamed to go see a doctor , so I waited for the charming lady , I had a feeling that she will come back to me in order to explain what’s all this matter , and I was right , she came in through my window and cast a spell on me , I recovered my normal shape , she didn’t let me ask her what’s going on she just whispered at me and said : ‘’ It’s always a bad idea to trust anyone you meet in the street , this is a lesson you may never forget’’ .
It really sounds unreal that every time I tell a friend about it , he starts laughing at me , I kept it for myself for a while and here I am sharing my story with you .
This is very creative. Good storytelling through writing.
DeleteIt was really a kind of magical experience that I’ve ever had in my life, it starts only with a tingling feeling and by the time the feeling becomes a sharp.
ReplyDeleteIt begins only with a small tasty drink that I’ve found in my room while my roommate was out and then while after while I started feeling like something is about to change inside my body then I had a strong headache after that I started acting abnormally like if somebody else was playing with my mind and telling to do stuff that I should not.
So I decided to see a doctor but I couldn’t show up because I discovered later my new wing that seems weird. I was really scared so I called my brother in order to get some help without getting out from my room but unfortunately he did not answer me for some personal reasons.
I was lost and upset without any help I was going to kill myself but of course I did not.
20 minutes later I heard somebody knocking at the door, Simo… Simo, are you there? – I did not replay.
Suddenly somebody pulled water on my face the I woke up and discover that it was a real bad nightmare. : p
Ah, the nightmare scenario. You must watch a lot of movies! Is your nickname Simo? That's a very cool nickname.
DeleteIt was a sunny day of September, it was hot outside and I was feeling thirsty so i decided to take some drink from the cafeteria's campus. I ordered an orange juice and sate outside. i took a sip from the drink and suddenly I felt differently, everything became weird . It was like some sort of a drug so I intend to take another sip, I did so and the feeling became sharper … So far, I was still keeping my cool but then I noticed something unusual. There were arms coming out of my body. I couldn’t believe it. Was I dreaming? I took another sip from this mysterious drink then a wing came out, I started to panic, should I just throw the drink away or finish it ? there wasn’t much left so I decided to drink what’s left of. So I drank it, I couldn’t feel anything after that, my heart was beating really fast. For a second I thought I was dying, then out of nowhere I just woke up. That’s when I realize it was fortunately a nightmare.
ReplyDeleteYes, the classic bad dream scene! Good work. Make sure you pay attention to punctuation and capitalization when writing blogs.
DeleteIn April 28th, I came home after school thirsty ;I opened the fridge and I took the juice that my brother have made in the last night. From the first sip ,I smelled something odd , but I thought that it is just because it's the first time I drink something made by my creasy little brother ;so I continue drinking . Suddenly, a third arm appeared from my back and started turning in every side and flying in the entire house.
ReplyDeleteTen minutes later, I felt a strong power pushing me outside , I couldn’t resist , the power took me to a strange way , I shouted but no one came for the help. After few second, I stopped in front of a big door , it was written on it < welcome to my paradise > . I was afraid and surprised in the same time. I didn’t know what is waiting me in this place. Once it opened, I saw a very big garden and different kind of flowers .It was wonderful. There, I met all my friends and family who died a several years ago. We started chilling and talking about everything. It was a very big surprise for me to see my grand-father that I have never seen before . At a moment , the door closed and I came back to my home . It was a n excellent experience . I would know what are the ingredient of this drink . Actually , I will try it again and again.
I'm really glad your story had a positive plot twist. That's very creative. Remember: In English, we use " " instead of < >.
DeleteSo when I drank a sip from this drink , I felt very differently . And then little by little and when I was drinking it , I started to see things , like arms out of my whole body and wings out of my back . I was like WHY I'M FEELING LIKE THAT ? , WHY I'M SEEING THIS THINGS ? But actually it was a really good taste , i like it . After that i figure out that the boy who give me this drink wanted to laugh and put in some drugs , and I knew that if I had finished the whole drink I'd like crazy to hallucinate things .
ReplyDeleteWow! That's scary. Make sure you are careful at parties so something like doesn't happen to you!. Also, make sure you write at least 8-10 sentences for your blog. This is a little short.
DeleteLast friday night I’ve decided to have a drink with some friend, we went to the closer bar because of the bad weather. Once we arrived we sat at the counter and ordered drinks, my drink was cold as I loved, the music was soft, the atmosphere was warm. I took a sip from my drink and suddenly I felt different. At first it was just a tingling feeling, but then the feeling becomes sharp. I told to my self that maybe my torso has an extra arm protruding from it. I took another sip of the drink and another arm appears. Then a wing. I started to panic, what was happening to me ? what was in my drink ? drugs? Hallucinogens ? I had no idea. I looked around to see if I was the only one feeling bad, my friends weren't paying attention to me, they were busy talking about their day. This situation was becoming really weird so I’ve decided to go away instead of talking to my friends so they don't panic. Once I arrived at home I took a shower and slept, the next day when I woke up I felt much better, the previous night was just a bad memory, a mystery ..
ReplyDeleteWow! That's a very creepy story. I bet an experience like that would be very scary. Good work!
Deleteone day, while i was with some friends, just walking in the street and having fun, we found out a new coffee shop that looks good from the first look, in addition to that, there was many beautiful girls there, so, we decided to try this coffee shop. Some of my friends buy a cup cake and juice the others just wanted to seduce the girls, for me, I decided to have a cup of tea, then, I sat alone to enjoy it. it smells very good, but I think it tastes so weir, but I didn’t care about that. when i took a first sip from my cup of tea, I suddenly felt differently, but I said to myself that was just a tingling feeling I felt like something was moving inside my stomach but then the feeling becomes sharp and an arm just appears from my torso, I was really shocked, people in the coffee shop including my friends saw me, so they start screaming and running away from me. I was so terrified so I thought that to fix that I should take another sip from the cup of tea but that just only goes worse another arm appears . I felt like I’m becoming a monster. So I throw away the cup of tea, and I start running in the street, when suddenly, I start flying, and I found out that I have wings in my back , then I start enjoying this flight when I heard a sound, it was like a phone call, the sound starts increasing, when suddenly I woke up in my bed, it was the alarm, ohh no ! it’s 11 AM , I’m late for school .
ReplyDeleteAh, the bad dream! It's a classic ending. You must watch a lot of movies and TV shows. Good job. Please work on your capitalization and punctuation when writing your blogs.
DeleteI have never been kenn on parties and getting drunk either, the simple thought of getting wasted overwhelms me. But then a question popped to my mind : What is the worst that could happen ? You will never know until yiu try, but what if after trying the memories kept making their way to your head, and you wish you hadn't experienced that. Everything happens for reason, but what happened that night was extremely unpredictable.
ReplyDeleteNo matter how close you will ever be to someone in your life, they will always be slightly different. Standing in front of the door where the party was thrown, I could have never imagined what it held behind. As I entered, I was immediately greeted by a tall figure I barely managed to analyse his traits : skinny, green eyes and quite curly hair. "How about we get a drink ?" he asked, I stared at him with eyes wide open, no sure how to feel about this sudden conversation. "Who are you ?" I answered ignoring his question, his gaze turned dark right after I questioned him. "Doesn't matter who I am." "I am not going anywhere without you answering my question." "If you accept my invitation, i'll tell you." "Sounds good." We sat down next to the bar as we were waiting for our drinks to come, once the barman handed them to us I instantly swallowed the blue drin, pushing the thought of being hangover at the back of my mind. "Woah slown it down there, it might not be a drink you're used to have," he said giving me a wink and starting to walk away. I didn't gave it that much of a thought so just filled up my cup loving the tickling feeling in my stomach, and burning one once it went down my throat. Cup after cup, I started feeling dizzy I didn't understand what was happening until wings started coming out of my back, arms popped from my waist and my feet got bigger and bigger. The house was no longer warm, it became cold and it turned into a cemetery, dead bodies came out of their graves and started making their way to me, I was scared. Even more when i saw a specifically huge body -that I recognized as the one belonging to the mysterious boy I met earlier.- with an axe moving closer and closer in order to kill me. "Should've not talked to me, and drunk the mixture sweetheart, now you're one of us, you can never escape this dark world." I started crying unsure whether it was a good idea to escape or just admit that I'll always be stuck here, with them. Then it all happened so quickly, my vision went blurry. next thing I remenbered I blacked out. I woke up in my bed,at home as if nothing happened, tears streaming down my face, uncertain of what was going on.
Was it a nightmare ?
Suddenly, a deep and low voice inside my head said : "Did you miss me ?"
This was real life, I realised in shock.
Wow! Your writing is very good. Your descriptions are so realistic and creative. I hope you practice your creative writing it home, too!
DeleteThe drink was so good. It tasted like cherries or raspberries with a little bit of lemon. The thing that I didn’t understand was that I bought that drink in a bottle of orange juice but it doesn’t taste like orange juice. I bought the juice from a shop that I’ve never noticed before in the street where I live. It was a strange shop with a lot of colors; moreover, even the seller was strange. His hair was red and blue and his eyes were green. I’m pretty sure that it was a male but his voice was a female voice and familiar to me. It was like a dream. When I went to the shop, I asked for apple juice but he told me that he only have orange juice so I took it. I was watching a movie when I took it then I felt differently. It was funny so I wanted to know what would happened if I finished all the bottle of juice. After the wing, my skin became pink with small red hearts. I tried to fly and it worked. Then I heard a strange voice telling me that I was a fairytale and that my mission was to help heartbroken person to find love. The voice was the same as the one of the seller and when I tried to respond I couldn’t. The only thing that I could do was to wake up from my dream.
ReplyDeleteSo, what it a dream, or not? I think you should continue this story. The descriptions are very good and creative.
DeleteDuring my last holidays, i went out with my friends to a restaurant, it was a very hot day and the waiter brought us a new energy drink and he told us that it was a gift from the restaurant. As i was very thirsty i thanked him and took a sip from it. At first the taste sounds familiar to me i thought it was redbull or one of those multinationals energy drink that we used to drink every day..then i start taking sip after sip. Suddenly i felt something irritating me, when i looked up i found an arm going out from me, then i turned and i found a wing. Things became strange and my friends ran out from me cause they were scared, after that i called the waiter then he told me that i have to finish the drink to appear normal again, but i didn't do it because i liked the new me.
ReplyDeleteThis story reminds me of the Red Bull commercials: "It gives you wings!" Very good writing, but please remember to use proper punctuation and capitalization.
DeleteLast Saturday morning I was sunbathing at the beach when one of my friends showed up. She looked so excited so I asked her why. She didn’t want to tell me, she just said I had to try a new drink that the new coffee shop had brought. It was called “wings up”. I went to the store, I was curious, nervous and excited so I didn’t give more time to it, and asked for a “wings up” can. My friend was staring at me so I took a sip of it. It had a weird taste, but was so refreshing. I focused on the taste when I saw my friend wide-eyed looking at me. –Wow, It was true! ; She said. I took another sip of it and then heard a loud scream coming from my friend. Two arms had grown out of my torse. I didn’t know what to think, so I suddenly took another sip, and two huge wings appeared. –Oh my God! ; She said while I started flying. I was so afraid and happy. Everyone was looking at me from the sand and the sea. It only lasted for 10 minutes, but it was definitely the most amazing experience I had ever had.
ReplyDeleteWouldn't it be amazing it we could buy drink that gave us otherworldly 10-minute experiences? Very good, descriptive writing. Keep up the good work!
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